Wednesday, 25 January 2012

Morning dip

25. Morning dip

Painful
to
watch
him
inch
ing
in
to
the
waves.
Takes
so
long
to
be
knee
deep.
I want him to
makeadashforitand
SCREAM!!!

6 comments:

jem said...

I like people who play with word layout - and you do it to great effect!

Annie said...

Hi Jem. Pleased it ticked the boxes, then!! Nice to have you drop by.

Steve Murphy said...

Didn't you want to just run behind him and push him in ?! And as Jem above - I loved the way you inch(ed) and inch(ing)ed in to the next line - I don't normally play about with form but I did the other day - it's here http://bit.ly/A1uIV2 if you get a chance to look :)

Annie said...

Hi Steve. Thanks. Yes!!

I want
ed
to
give
him
a
great
big
shove
but it didn't make for such a good piece, and he was bigger than me.

Fiona Dempster said...

I love the layout play - it worked perfectly for me!

Annie said...

Hi Fiona. Thanks. I had fun with this one, so pleased you enjoyed it as well.